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در آزمون آیلتس، داوطلبان باید هم قسمت‌های مختلف را به خوبی در پاسخ پوشش دهند و برای آن‌ها توضیحات کافی بدهند و هم این‌که به وضوح مشخص باشد که موضع آن‌ها چیست. به مثال زیر دقت فرمایید:

Some people say the best way to improve public health is buy increasing the number of sport facilities. However other say this would have little effect on public health and other measures are required. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.

برای این سوال، شما باید سه قسمت را به خوبی پوشش دهید و در مورد آن‎‌ها کامل توضیح دهید. 1) قسمت اول: چرا عده‌ای فکر می‌کنند که برای بهبود سلامت همگانی باید امکانات ورزشی را زیاد کرد. 2) قسمت دوم: چرا بقیه فکر می‌کنند که افزایش امکانات چاره ساز نیست و بقیه راه‌کارها چیست؟ 3) قسمت سوم: نظر شما در این باره چیست؟

حالا من در قالب یک مقاله کامل، قسمت‌های مختلف را برای شما پوشش می‌دهم.

improvement in public health has always been a major concern. Regarding this issue some believe that the goal of public health is achieved through increase of facilities in different places. But other think that this procedure might not be very beneficial. In my idea,  just increasing the number of sport facilities will not make any significant improvement in the overall public health.

On the one hand, the more facilities might make it more convenient for people to do a regular exercise. This means that when individuals in one area have more access to sport facilities, they are more likely to commit themselves to do physicals activities. The reasons are, firstly, they are not supposed to spend many hours finding suitable facilities because they are everywhere in their neighborhoods. Secondly, These individuals do not have to spend any money for commuting to the areas provided with more facilities. For instance, they go out of their house and without taking a public transport or driving their cars, they are able to have access to the sport facilities. As a result, saving perspicuous time and money are two motivational factors for people when sport facilities are available in every part.

However, lacking motivation and not having enough free time could be other reasons for not improving health in spite of many sport facilities. The reality is that some people are reductant to do sport for their health improvement because they  lack enough motivation. People who are not aspired and motivated intrinsically, are not likely to appreciate the significance of sport even if they live in an area with many sport facilities. In addition, there is a huge number of people nowadays who are always in a hurry, fulfilling one responsibilities and starting a new one, achieving one aim and planning for the next one. Consequently, they are left with little amount of free time when doing a physical activity may not be a priority at all.

In conclusion, although increasing sport facilities could provide people with a chance to look after their health, this is not the only reason. I believe that accessibility is not the only solution since  people  do not consider sport very essential as a result of not having motivation and extra time.

در این مقاله موضع به خوبی نشان داده شده است و این‌که پاراگراف‌ها هم توضیح داده شده‌اند.